First intro video. Looking for critique

I’ve done this intro video test for my chanel in YouTube. I’d appreciate get some critique.
I have a very lousy computer and I don’t have many time, so I know that it need more samples.

Thank you for your help.

Jorge.

(sorry for my bad english):no:

-I think that the first part, when the camera slides over, is to long .

I like the part when the words come into perspective.

-the building does not look like it has a texture on it.
-not sure what the orange things in the ceiling are.
-also, the room feels really empty. If you put furniture in the room it might help.(and maybe a door)?

I think you pulled it off pretty good though!